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Welcome, welcome one and all. Are you ready for some Dumbpire? Tonight we're going to be QCing chapter 47.

Here's how this is going to work. I'm going to go over a page myself, make any corrections I think are needed, then post the raw page and the QCed translations here.

That's where you come in. If you see something I missed, or have a suggestion for better wording, hop in and rip me a new one! We'll all argue about it and the end result will go in the next chapter release. Everyone wins!

So, starting with page 25, let's begin:

[Today, I am]
[Going to tell Shiragami I love her!]

QC: No corrections seem to be made here.
Weren't the first few pages posted in the last QC thread?
Looks good
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[At least, that’s what I thought.But...]
{Bring it on!}


I’m... I’m sorry Shiragami Youko...! Please forg-... No, no need to forgive me!
Use this and just pound away at me until you’re content!

<background imagery> {Don’t worry about a seppuku!} {What?}

Aizawa-san?! W-would ya stop bowin’ on the ground?!

(This situation’s a little different than what I had in mind!!)
[Chapter 47: “Let’s Go Confess!”]

QC: This page looks good too.


Possibly! I'm going to go from the top though, since this is my first pass. Also, no bitching if I'm slow.
Reminder that alien has proven herself to be the worst girl in the last chapter
The background text is all one sentence, not two. A more accurate rendering would be
>You don't need to commit seppuku!
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H-Hold on... Before anything though,
Are you okay, Shiragami...? Are you hurt?

Um... yeah, I’m okay. I’m pretty tough.

N-no, please! Get yourself examined at a hospital!!

Uh, Class Rep... Shiragami hasn’t gone to sleep, so I’m pretty sure that that’s just a shovel-

A shov- IT’S A SLEEP INDUCTION DEVICE!! (It was turned off is all!)

But you just said “shov”!

Doing such a thing to a friend... What have I done...

A-Aizawa-san, I’m fine, really!

(Shiragami seems... okay, I guess.
I was worried for a bit when that thing hit her square in the head though.)

B-but hey, puttin’ that aside.


QC: Still looks good. Maybe this was /a/ QCed already. We'll get to the meat of it shortly.

...Actually yeah, that does sound better. Thanks. Correction made.
Reminder that Vampire wasn't even waiting on the roof. She met them two floors down, after Asahi and Alien had been running around, and presumably she was just walking. She'd already left the roof before he was confronted.
>H-Hold on... Before we get to that,

>I was worried for a bit when that thing hit her square on the head though.

>B-but le's talk about somethin' else.
If I recall, this is the start of a sentence that continues on to the next page. It's not a question in and of itself.
she went down because alien was stalling and she was curious why asahi was late
if she didnt stalll them then she would still be on the roof
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Yeah... I'm looking at that right now. We can just do it together.

Here's the next page:

S-So [QC: This should probably change to something like "U-um..." to follow with the previous page since it's a continuous thought]
What did you wanna see me about today...?
You were saying you wanted to tell me somethin’...?
<background> {Yah!} *smack* {From behind?!}
(You’re asking me that now?!)

[Yes, that’s right Shiragami-san!
I was planning on confessing my love to you today!]
[However, that incident just now has completely wiped my mind clean and it’s kind of...]

(Come back! All those ideas and resolutions
I made over the past few days have returned to me!) [QC: Okay this is awkward. I'm thinking that perhaps it should say "Focus! I need to remember all those convictions I made over the past few days!"]

(W-wait, the Class Rep! I’ve got no idea why,
but she was trying to stop me!)

[Then she’ll probably try to intervene on this conversation too...]
[I can use that time to gather my thoughts again!][QC: that->this]

[QC: BTW, I'm typesetting these changes after we decide on them, so that's why I'm slow.]
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Actually, eff it, instead of typesetting while I correct, I'm just gonna post the pages with my corrections in QC comments, we can discuss them, and then I'll fix the typesetting.

Sorry folks, I'm new at this and being a bit of a baka.

Next page:

<background> {Farewell!} {Why’d you come here?!}
Now then, I suppose I’ll take my leave.
Class Rep, come back!!

Wait, why?! A minute ago, you were stopping me like no tomorrow![QC: Wait up! A minute ago you were dead set on stopping me!]
I... I’m sorry... I don’t know what came over me...
To try to beat and incapacitate you with the shov-... sleep induction device...
Wait, accidentally saying “shovel” there is extremely concerning.

Now... Stop worrying about me, and go confess to her.
Well, yeah, I want to?! But, in the current mood?![QC: That last sentence is awkward. Any thoughts on a better one?]

Oh, Kuromine-kun, Aizawa-san. Here’s some Takoyaki!
Might be a tiny bit cold now though.
For us?

>Come back to me!
>All those resolutions I've made these past few days, come back!

>[Then she'll probably try to interrupt this conversation too...]
>[I can use that time to gather my wits!]
>Um... yeah, I’m okay. I’m pretty tough.

Where does the pretty part come from?
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It did get cold...

But even if it’s a bit cold, this Takoyaki’s...
Quite good.

Sure is! I don’t know what it is about Takoyakis at festivals, but...[QC: What is the plural about Takoyaki? Taokyaki? Takoyaki sounds better...]

(Wait, what am I doing getting chilled out?!} [QC: Wait, what am I doing acting casual?!]
{For you!}
{Oh, thanks}
The confession... Yes, the confession!

[The mood’s making it even more difficult! What am I gonna do?!
I... I have to do something to change the flow!]

...Excuse us, Shiragami Youko. Could you please wait there for a moment?
...? Okay!
Huh? C-Class Rep...?

No clue. It's what's in the script. I'm not a TLer.
>Now then! I suppose I shall leave you now.

>N-no way!! Confess, now!? In this atmosphere!?
She says
>My body is robust/solid/durable.
>Oh! Kuromine-kun, Aizawa-san, here's some takoyaki!
>It might be a little cold though.

Forgot these. There was a moderately long discussion about it in the last thread too. Alternative:
>Oh! Kuromine-kun, Aizawa-san, have some takoyaki!
Wait, I thought this chapter has been translated a few days ago.
I can see "I'm okay" as a non-literal translation for that. Just the pretty part comes out of nowhere.
Takoyaki is the plural and singular of takoyaki.

>But even if it did get cold, this takoyaki is...
>Yeah! I don't know what it is about takoyaki at festivals, but...

>The confession...
>The confession------!!
"Pretty" is just used as a superlative to emphasize "tough." Like saying "The sun's pretty bright" instead of "The sun's bright."
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Calm down, Kuromine Asahi...
You will have to create your own flow of things.[QC: You have to change the mood yourself.]
Class Rep...?
Honestly, I can tell just by looking at you. (You are easy to read)

B-But, I mean... wait, why are you helping me
Instead of... stopping me?
Because I couldn’t bear to watch, so I will teach you how. And more importantly...

...I would like to make amends if you’d let me...
{The more I think back, I just...}
{I don’t even know what to say...}
Well, that’s...

...It’s already in the past now anyway, so don’t worry about it.
And I don’t know why, but it’s encouraging to have your help, Class Rep.
Instructor Aizawa, it’ll be my pleasure.

...Very well.

[QC: Alium giving dating advice? This will end badly...]


...Okay maybe I'm flubbing this up. How far did you guys get in the last chapter?
I wasn't around.
Oh wait, I read it all the time as "I'm pretty though" which made no sense to me.
"I'm pretty tough" is acceptable.
Maybe chane it to "My body is pretty tough"
This far. >>115263160
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Okay so we're in fresh territory? Okay. Sorry for the repeats folks.

But my training is no cake walk, Trainee Kuromine!
Are you ready for it?!
Y-Yes ma’am!
...Wait, she just got into some weird mode, didn’t she?! (I already have a bad feeling about this...!)

(Start with a jab! Jab, and get your distance!
And then you fight by putting yourself in your best position!) [QC: I could use suggestions on this one...]

O-Oh, done talkin’?

Nice weather today, isn’t it?
I think it’s cloudin’ up a bit now actually.
>You must direct the flow of events yourself.
Might also work.

>Th-that's not what I mean...
>You were trying to stop me and now...
>Eh? We're teaming up...?
>Because I cannot bear to see this continue, I shall teach you. And more importantly...
>If you accept, I can make amends...

>I'd be honored, Instructor Aizawa.
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And um-...
Wait. Cloudy? [QC: These words don't match what the bubbles are emoting... might have to change the order of this.]
Yeah, it might rain a little after this.
Hope it lasts till the end of the Festival though....[QC: Hope it doesn't till the end of the Festival though....]



What am I to do if I miss my jab?![QC: What should I do if my jab misses?!]
I actually didn’t think anyone being this bad at throwing jabs...[QC: I actually didn't think anyone could be this bad at throwing punches...]

No matter... Change of plans!
Sometimes, flow can only be changed by forcefully pulling it towards you.[QC: Wat]

Here is an example! Keep watching, Trainee Kuromine.

(Wonder what those two are talkin’ about.
...Something to do with why Kuromine-kun called for me?) [QC: Something to do with why Kuromine-kun told me to wait for him?]
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(Ugh... This isn’t helping.
It’s been days since he asked me to come out, and I’ve been thinking too much about this...)

Shiragami Youko!


Yeah, I like you too, Aizawa-san.


[QC: This chapter is hilarious. I love the boxing match going on.]
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...See that?
{Why are you looking so proud?!}
What do you mean, “See that”?!
I don’t even know where to start with you!
Both of ‘em are kinda weird today.

And Kuromine-kun was a bit weird that day too... Hmm...?

(I’ve got something to tell you, Shiragami.
About that secret I’d been hiding all that time.)[QC: I'd->I've]

[And he seemed... really serious about it too...]

(Kuromine-kun’s secret... What is it?)

>Are you prepared!?

Missing translation:
>Why did the mini-Aizawa
>come out!?

>W-wait, I just flipped some weird switch, didn't I!?

>First, throw a jab! Jab, and get some distance!!
>Then, fight at your own pace!
I'm reasonably certain that the literal translation is "Fight in your own time!"

>Actually, ah think it's cloudin' up a bit now.
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...Wish it was Asahi-kun...[QC: ...Wish it was about Asahi-kun]
...’bout me...[QC: ...'nd me...]

[W-What am I thinkin’?!]
[No way, that can’t be! (Too much soap opera!)] [QC: I've seen too many soaps!]

[I mean, I’m always causin’ trouble for Kuromine-kun
And Kuromine-kun’s just ‘bout sweet with anyone!][QC: And Kuromine-kun's nice to everyone!]
[Besides, I’m just friends with Kuromine-kun aren’t I?! Just friends...]


Ah shoot, I deleted that line because I didn't see where it fit in. That's one of the few pages that isn't typeset yet. I'll re-add it.
tfw gf
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No, I... understand the logic, but confessing right there was just... sorry...
...I suppose it’s difficult for a person like you.
Then how about you remind yourself?[QC: Then how about you try remembering...]


Don’t you have something?
Some trigger that made a wimp like you decide to tell her you love her.

Just get out there already!

...I can guarantee you.
Take into account notes from this:
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Will do. Thanks.

I’ve been watching both of you.
I really have been watching you... so I know I’m sure.[QC: I've been watching you both closely... so I'm positive.]
All you’ll need to do is be confident, and tell her so.[QC: Lose the so]



Thanks, Class Rep.
Go on then!

>And y'kno-
>Huh, clouds?
>Yeah. It looks like it'll rain later.
>I hope it holds off until after the festival though.

>I didn't think anyone could be this bad at throwing jabs...

>Sometimes the flow can only be changed by dragging it towards you.
It literally does say "Forcefully pulling it towards you."

>Let me show you! Watch closely, Kuromine Asahi!
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Um... Shi-Shiragami... Uh
[Wait, w- why you lookin’ so serious?!]

[I-I mean, Kuromine-kun’s secret. That must be like][QC: That->it]
[He’s a vampire, or an alien or somethin’ like that, right?]

The thing about my secret...

[W-W-Why am I gettin’ so flustered?
Kuromine-kun... ‘bout me? No way!][QC: This is tough... the way the Japanese sentence is structured, it doesn't explicitly mention like or love, so I'm hesitant to put that in there. It's implied but... IDK. This wording is still awkward though]

[That’s just me dreamin’.
I mean, if it was true... then I thought it’s kinda nice... but that’s all]

[...“If it was true”...?]
>It's been days since he asked ta talk ta me, and I been thinkin' so much about it...

>I truly-
>Like you!

>I see,
>Thank you!!
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[But if it was true]
[What am I going to do?]

To tell you the truth,
Shiragami, I’m in l-

Aw hell.

Way to go, dorama maker.
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BTW, I'm gonna use my discretion on what changes to make and what to keep. Stuff like this, changing "thanks" to "thank you" starts getting into personal preferences, so don't be offended if I keep some things the way they are.


I like you too, ya know...?
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And now we're off for twenty or thirty chapters of MISUNDERSTANDING
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This is it. I had everything I expected for now.

Shiragami, do you mean...

And I like Aizawa-san a lot, and like Shiho and Akemi-san and Rin-chan too! Akane-chan, I like a tiny bit!


And Oka-kun and Shima-kun and Sakura-san and Koumoto-sensei are friends to me.[QC: Someone check the spelling on all these names please.]
Yeah! I like all my friends! Yep!

U-...um, Shiragami-san?

Sheesh, that’s nothing worth repeatin’ about![QC: Sheesh, it doesn't need to be said 'gain.]
Wait, I haven’t said any-...[QC: Wait, I haven't said what I-...]
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Foolish me.
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{Huh? Huh?}
Well, s-
See ya!



(To tell you the truth,
Shiragami, I’m in-)
[W-W-What you were tryin’ to say back there, Kuromine-kun?!
What? No... No, that can’t be!]

[That’s impossible, but why am I....]
[Do I... ‘bout Asahi-kun too...? N-No way!]

[QC: Once a bawka...]
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[Can’t be... No, can’t be! It couldn’t be, could it?!]

Did I just...
...get shot down?


And that's the last page.
>{What are you so proud of!?}
>What do you mean, “Well" !?

>And Kuromine-kun was a little weird that day too... Hmm...?
>[Really...And he seemed so serious about it too...]

>I wonder if it's about me...
>And Asahi-kun...

>[No way, it can’t be! ('Been watching too much TV drama!)]

>[I mean, I’m always causin’ trouble for Kuromine-kun,]

>...I suppose it is difficult for a person like you.
Why not try and remember?

>Wasn't there something?
>Some trigger that made even a wimp like you decide to tell her that you love her.

>I really have been watching you... so I'm sure.
Oh, I got Chapter 48 as well.

Want some Orangey goodness?
Yes, yes I do.

This is far better than studying for the exam I have tomorrow morning
Do what must be done.
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Oh, Mikan-chan.
Hey Mei-chan,
Is Asahi around?

Yeah, think so. Nii-chan should be in his room.[QC: The editor wanted me to note that nii-chan is the correct variation here, so won't be changing this]
Heard he got rejected by someone again.
So I figured I should cheer him up.

Ohhh, I see.
He did seem pretty down, but now I know why.
>A shov- IT’S A SLEEP INDUCTION DEVICE!! (It's just that it was turned off)
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Oh, by the way.
Mikan-chan, I’m heading out, so think you could lock the door?
Mr. and Mrs. Kuromine aren’t here?
Nope! They’re out shopping, and they said they’ll be stopping at a DIY store, so they’ll be late.[QC: Wat]

Well, take care of Nii-chan would you? Thanks!
...Trying to cheer up a
Broken-hearted Asahi-kun! That’s so sweet, Mikan-san...!

Huh? Mikan-san?
Leaving already? Where to?

Is this your apartment complex...
>Um... Shi-Shiragami... Y'know...
>[W-w-why're ya lookin’ so serious?!]
>[I-is it that? Kuromine-kun's secret,]
>[Is he’s a vampire, or an alien or somethin’ like that, right?]

>The thing about my secret...

>[W-W-Why am I gettin’ so flustered?
Kuromine-kun... ‘bout me? No way!]
I'd leave this as is.

>[Tha’s just me dreamin'!]
>[I mean, if it was true... then it'd be kinda nice... but that’s all!]
>[..."If it was true?"]

>[If it was true...]
>[What am I goin' ta do?]
Nice counter, Shiragami.

>Background Signs

>And Oka-kun and Shima-kun and Sakura-san and Koumoto-sensei are all friends to me.
Spelling is fine.

>Sheesh, it's nothin' that needs ta be said again!
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Right then
Let’s go cheer that guy up!
Mi-...Mikan-san? Is cheering him up really what you’re going to do? (What was that just now...?)

Oh please. What are you talking about?

[QC: Girls need BATTLE ARMOR, also no corrections really needed here.]
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Like hell I’m gonna cheer anyone up!
What!? (Seriously!?)
Asahi just gotten shot down and he’s the only one in the house. That’s a one-in-a-million chance...
If there’s ever a time to make my move on him, it’s gotta be now!
[Chapter 48: “Let’s Woo Someone!”]

Now that I know Asahi sees me as a woman, I know exactly what I have to do.
I give him a piece of me, get him in the mood, if only for a second, do what I gotta do, and the rest will be a cake walk.[QC That first part is bad...]
Mikan-san... I had recently begun thinking you were finally coming to be honest with yourself.
But why do you have to go to the extremes?[QC: coming to->becoming, also remove 'the']
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My intention was to support what you’re doing,
but if you’re going to take drastic measures like that, I won’t!

Oh. Then why don’t you try and get in the way?
Because I know you’re good at it.
Right, God of Misfortune? (heart)

Very well! Correcting your ways is also my duty as a God of Fortune! I will be doing everything in my powers to stop you!
Okay then. Better give it every bit you got, misfortune incarnate!
Mommy, that person’s talking to her glasses.
Shh, don’t look!

<door sign>{Asahi}
Asahi, I’m coming in.
Disclaimer: The original Japanese text may or may not override any or all of these corrections.

"am" ==> "will" & omit "going to"

"until you're content" ==> "to your heart's content"
"you don't need to commit seppuku!"

Make sure you put commas before "though" at the end of sentences.
"square on the head"
"it was just turned off!"
"puttin' that aside" sounds correct, I don't know what >>115262734 was thinking there.

"Focus! I need to remember all those convictions I made over the past few days!" is good; use it.
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Heard from Oka-kun.[QC: I was talking to Oka-kun]
He said you got shot down by Shiragami-san?[QC: He said Shiragami-san shot you down, eh?]
Damn it, Oka...

(Man... things are still a bit awkward with Mikan,
Ever since I said no to her confession in the future the other day...)
(Wait, “the future the other day”? How does that make sense...?)[QC: I know right?! Try saying that sentence to ANYONE and not sound like a crazy person.]

(Mikan-san’s making her move!)

I must protect Asahi-kun’s chastity...
{May Fortune favor Asahi-kun!}
Before Mikan-san does something outrageous!

*pat*[QC: LEWD]
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>[Wh-wh-what were ya tryin’ to say back there, Kuromine-kun?!]
>[Huh? Huh!? No... No, you can't!]

>[It’s impossible, but why am I....]

>Mikan-chan, I’m heading out. Do you think you could lock the door?

>Auntie and Uncle aren’t home?
Dunno how it is in other parts of the English-speaking world, but referring to adult friends of the family as auntie and uncle is common where I'm from. Alternatively:
>Your parent's aren't home?

>Nope! They’re out shopping, and they said they’ll be stopping at a home improvement store, so they'll be late.
Basically going to Home Depot.

>Isn't this your apartment building...
Mikan is Charismatic Pervert II?
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Huh? Wha- Mikan?
Wh-What?! I’m not doing anything weird?![QC: Hmm... the original sentence has a question mark in it, but it seems wrong here...]

(Please... Please, something...!)
(Will something happen already...?!
Otherwise, Mikan-san will end up taking a drastic and violent-...?)
*thump thump thump*
*thump thump*

Are you... trying to console me...?
N-no! I mean, don’t you have an opinion of some kind?![QC: I have NO idea what this sentence is supposed to be saying]
Like, how my hand’s warm, how it’s soft, or... something?!
Mikan-san... Could it...)
[QC: Wait up! A minute ago you were dead set on stopping me!] is good
"Now then, I suppose I’ll take my leave." is good, not sure about >>115263193's first line

Get rid of "here's some takoyaki". Replace it with something like "I brought some takoyaki" or "I got some takoyaki" or "have some takoyaki" depending on the original meaning. Here's some discussion on the topic:
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Hey Nii-chan? Did you see my cell phone?
Did you check the bathroom? You always leave it there.
Oh yeah.
(Could it be that that was your attempt at seducing him?!)

You want me to help you find it?
Mm, no it’s okay! It’s probably in the bathroom anyway.
Okay, see you again![QC: Okay, later! or Okay, suit yourself!]
*thump thump*
*whisper whisper*
I’m sorry Mikan-san...

*whisper whisper*
That person barging in was my fault...
That was your doing?!

*whisper whisper*
...Wait a sec. Why are you apologizing?
I thought you were gonna try to stop me.
*whisper whisper*
Well I was, but...

That's a nice orange.
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I just didn’t realize how timid you were at this sort of thing.
I’m so sorry for getting in your way...
Who the hell are you calling timid?!

J-Just watch! I’ll get serious, and Asahi will just as easily-[QC: And Asahi will fall head over heals for-]
Oh yeah, Mikan.

About the consoling me and stuff... You don’t have to worry about that.
I know I’ve said it before...
But if I did have you do that to me, I’ll seriously think I’m just be a dirt bag...[QC: But if I had to have you do that for me, I'd seriously start to think I'm a dirt bag...]

So... sorry. But thank you, though.
*thump thump*
Um, okay...?

...B-but it’s kind of hot in here, don’t you think?
But it’s almost winter...?

>Right then!

>Asahi just got shot down and he’s the only one home. That’s a one-in-a-million chance...
>If there was ever a time to make my move on him, it’s gotta be right now!

>Give him a taste, get him in the mood for just a second, do what I gotta do and the rest'll be a cake walk.
>Mikan-san... I thought you were finally becoming honest with yourself,
>But why do you always go to such extremes!?

>It was my intention to support your dreams,
>but if you take such drastic steps, I won't!

>Oh really. Then why don’t you try and get in the way?
>I already know you're good at that.

>Very well! Correcting your ways is also my duty as a God of Fortune! I will do everything in my power to stop you!
>Alright then. Better give it every bit you've got, "Mis" Fortune God!
Should be "takoyaki" No "s" at the end and not capitalized.

>getting chilled out
No. "Calming down", "Getting calmed down", or "chilling out" in that order by my personal preference, unless the japanese conveys a different meaning.
Your "acting casual" line might work better.

>The confession... Yes, the confession!
"The confession... Right, the confession!" or "The confession... The confession!!"

>The mood's making it
"This mood's making it"
>I... I have to do something to change the flow!]
The flow ==> the/this mood
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I do think it’s hot in here...
Why?! Why do you go to the extremes?!

(No... I have to stop this!)
*thump thump thump*
<bottom right> M-Mikan! Put your clothes on, would you?! I’ll turn the AC on as much as you want!
<top left>O-Oh... No, don’t worry about it.
Just do it!

*thump thump*
(So how about it, misfortune?!
Now can you see how timid I am?!)[QC: Not so timid now eh?!]

(I, Akemi Mikan, am always on the offensive! The perpetual perpetrator!
I don’t need this armor called clothes to protect me!)[QC: I don't need this flimsy covering to protect me!]

[QC: I warned you guys]
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She actually delivered.
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Asahi! I went and found a bookstore with a bunch of MILF porno mags for you!
So cheer up!
Wha?! Shi-Shima... Good timing-
W-Wait?! Why would I be so happy about MILF mags?![QC: ...Does this seriously say MILF? Someone check the translation on this...]

Oh you know. Just happy to have you back on our side-
I mean uh, got worried about you getting shot down.
{The door was open, so I got in here myself}[QC: so I invited myself in]
You’re totally happy about this, aren’t you.

Oh hey?
The scumbag queen’s here.


[QC: Enter Shima, exit Shima.]
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Shima! Are you okay?!
It-... It’s the bookstore in the shopping area’s back alley... Okay? Asa-... hi-...
...Forgot to lock the door...
*creak creak creak creak*
And you! I thought you weren’t gonna step in anymore?!
And that was completely unacceptable! (Ow, ow, ow!)

U-Um... Mikan...?

I um... really think you should be a little more conscious about the fact that you’re a girl, okay?
Like, suddenly taking your clothes off like that because of the temperature...
And throwing Shima out too...
>Because I couldn't bear to watch, so I will teach you how.
This sounds awkward, but I'm not sure how to fix it.
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...Already plenty aware about that.[QC: I'm gonna add an " 'm" at the start of that sentence]

What?! Then why did you just...

And I’ll tell the same to you, Asahi.[QC: And I'll say the same thing to you, Asahi.]

...Look at me.

I want you to look at me more as a girl,
and properly too.[QC: and thoroughly too.]

>That fucking MEGA MILK look

I love this. Delicious orange
>I heard about it from Oka-kun.
>So, Shiragami-san shot you down, eh?
>...It still feels awkward to be around Mikan.
>Ever since I
>...Things still feel awkward with Mikan,
>Ever since I said "No" to her confession in the future the other day...
>Wait, “the future the other day?" How does that make any sense?

>Wh-What is it!? Nothin' wrong with this, right!?
>Are you... trying to console me?

>N-nuh uh! Just what the hell are you thinking!?
>That my hand's warm, or that it's gentle, or... whatever!?
>C-could it be...

>Nii-chan? Have you seen my cell phone?
>Did you check the bathroom? Isn't that where it always shows up?
>Could it be...
>That was your attempt at seducing him?!

>That was you!?

>I thought you were gonna try and stop me.
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Yo, Asahi.
Came to laugh at your sad little face. Better be thankin’ us.[QC: Why would he thank them?!]
Don’t worry! You’ll get your chance again somewhere.[QC: somewhere->sometime]
Oka?! Sakura-san?!
(Forgot to lock the door agaaaaiiiiiin!)

There was a piece of trash that looked awfully like Shima.[QC: Gonna insert an outside in that sentence somewhere]
That’s actually Shima.
*whisper whisper*
(What the hell, Misfortune?! That wasn’t out of bounds!)
*creak creak creak creak*
Ow, owww! That hurts!
It was a bit of a knee-jerk reac-...
But wait! It’s all only because of your mischievous daily conducts![QC: Gonna remove daily]

What’s up, Mikan-chan? And why the red face?
Oh. With make-up on too, that’s rare.


[QC: 3 guesses as to what's gonna happen next...]
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And the god of blueballs intervenes today too.

I fucking hate you, god of blueballs.
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Well, we’ll be goin’ now.
*snicker snicker*
*smile smile*
Don’t mind us.
{Huh? Huh}
But I thought you... just got here...
Just what are you tryin’ to say with that grin on your face?!

Well, good luck,
Miss Scumbag (not)[QC: I need to look up what he called her in the chapter where they were talking about her secret...]

Okaaaaaa?! Sakura-saaaaaaan?!

[QC: He didn't even remove his hands from his pockets.]
It's a 4 kanji form though, which are usually stock phrases of some sort. In American, "Built Ford Tough", for example, although Americanisms aren't appropriate to this character.
>sometimes, you can only change the mood by forcing it where you want it
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Oka! Sakura-san! Are you okay?!
Whew... there, we’ve gotten the obstacles out of the way.
But they were just on their way out normally through the front door?![QC: "weren't they just on their way out...]

And now that, we’ve gotten the obstacles out of the way...[QC: Getting rid of that comma...]
Let’s start where we left off.

I want you to look me more as a girl, and properly too...[QC: Whatever we decide for the previous line will get copied here]
*thump thump*
Are you trying to get back into it in this atmosphere?!

(No, Mikan-san, that’s impossible.
You can’t just pretend that thing didn’t happen a minute ago?!)[QC: 'that thing'?]
W-wait, Mikan! Time out!
I mean, it’s just... Um, time out!
Oh, geez...
Shut up already...
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...Just how much courage do you think
it takes for me to do something like this.

*thump thump*
*thump thump*
*thump thump*


I’m sorry, Mikan!
But I can’t, I-....
Call me a wuss, but
I just can’t forget about Shiragami,so I-!

[QC: Mikan has more balls than most of this cast.]
Is Glasse guy the best character in the manga ?
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Hmph. Did you think I’d kiss on the lips? Well, tough luck.

Why don’t you try to remember about what happened.
Did Shiragami-san really reject you? I bet she just ran before you could confess. Am I right?
Well... that’s...

You keep going after Shiragami-san, and not give up on her. [QC: and don't give up on her.]
At the same time...
>>sometimes, you can only change the mood by forcing it where you want it to be
My vote goes to Sakura-san
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Maybe, but damned if Mikan isn't trying to usurp him.


I won’t give up on you either.
And some day, I’m going to make you be the one coming to kiss me![QC: I'm going to make you be the one to try to kiss me!]

Well, I’m off then.
Make sure to lock the door!

...I’m sorry, Mikan-san.
I was mistaken.

You were just trying to cheer him up in your own way!
Ugh... Shut up will you? I should’ve just left you at home.
Then nobody would’ve seen that-
>>It's been days since he asked ta talk ta me, and I been thinkin' so much about it...
Laying it on a bit thick there.
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would’ve seen...

A kiss on Asahi’s forehead, eh? That was so cute, Mikan-chan.
Sorry, it was just that the window was wide open.
{Oh yeah}
{Oh my}
<between Oka & Sakura’s faces>*snicker snicker*
{Forgot the curtains!}


And that's that!

I still don't know what to do about the MILF lines...
But she already knows she is the winner.

Nah, Mikan is made of stronger stuff. Stronger, eviler stuff.

I pointed out most of my suggested changes in [QC] comments, so have at it for a while. Make sure to check the later pages/chapter, and don't just focus on the same pages. I'll collect your comments and make changes.
Fucking based Underdog
The Japanese there is 人妻, lit. "someone's wife" which is like a porno category of sorts.
So that would technically be "a wife I'd like to fuck". I dunno if that works very well.

Any porn masters here who can come up with a category name?
It should say "wish" instead of "wonder"
>And Kuromine-kun’s sweet with just ‘bout anyone
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Oh shit Beer-kun, you better get your shit together and go back attacking the dumbpire.

Just look at how corageous delicious Orange is!
>Why don't you try to remember?
Got the source on this manga ? Tried to find it the other day but Google was shit.
>I didn’t realize how much of a late bloomer you were.
>I'm very sorry for getting in your way.
>Who the hell are you calling a late bloomer!?
The term used is definitely "late bloomer" and it's supposed to imply she's still something of a child, but timid works too as more of a direct insult to her shy approach.

>J-Just watch! I’ll get serious, and Asahi will fall under-

>But if I let you do that for me, I'd seriously start to think I was just a dirtbag.

>So... sorry. But I'm glad you came.

>It’s almost winter, you know?

>It's kind of hot in here...

>Why do you always go to such extremes!?
>This is bad! I have to stop this!

>H-how's that, Misfortune?!
>This isn't something a late bloomer would do, is it!?

>These clothes...
>Are just feeble binders that I no longer need!

>Asahi! I went and found a bookstore with a bunch of housewife porno mags for you!
Hitoduma literally means "Another man's wife." ousewives aren't always MILFs. Just like Christmas Cakes aren't usually MILFs.

>Wha?! Shi-Shima... Good timing-
W-Wait?! Why would I be so happy about housewife mags?!

>Oh, no reason! It's just nice to have yhou back on our side
Oh you know. Just happy to have you back on our side...
TL Note: The sad virgin side
>I mean, uh, I was worried about you after what happened.

>The evil queen's here too?

>The bookstore's in the back alley of the shopping district... Got it... A...sa...hi...

>You bitch! I thought you weren’t gonna get in the way!?
>Th-that was completely unacceptable! (It hurts, it hurts!)

>...Look at me.
>Look at me as a girl,
>Look long, and look hard, at me.

I've no idea anon, sorry
>if it was true
Change to "if it were true" in both instances
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Spoilering source requests will not save you from our wrath.

>were true
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>Akane-chan, I like a tiny bit!
Wat. She actually took her top off? No magic, no tricks, no mind control?
There's an "I" missing before "like Shiho and Akemi-san"
>are friends to me
Either "are all my friends", "all are my friends", or "are all friends to me", with the possibility of adding a comma and "too" at the end of the sentence.
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Thanks brah.

Mikan's Mikans were on full display.

Going to bed, I'll check the thread in the morning.
>We came here to laugh at you. You should thank us.
>Don't worry! You'll get your chance someday!
>There was some garbage out there that looked a lot like Shima.
>That was Shima.
>That was just an instinctive rea-
>Hold on! It's because of your naughty behavior every day!

>Why's your face all red, Mikan-chan?
>Oh wow, and you've got some make-up on too? That's rare.

>Well, I hope things work out.
>"Evil" Queen.

>Weren't they just on their way out the door!?

>And now that we’ve gotten those obstacles out of the way...
>Let’s pick up where we left off.
>...Look at me.
>Look at me as a girl...

>Are you trying to get back into it after all that!?

>No way, it's impossible Mikan-san!
>You can't just pretend that didn't just happen a minute ago!!
>M-Mikan! T-Time out!
W-wait, Mikan! Time out!

>Just how much...
>Courage do you think I need to do this?

>Just keep on chasing after Shiragami-san, and don't give up on her.
>And I ...

>I won't stop chasing you either.
>And someday, you're going to be the one coming to kiss me!
All instances of "If it was true" could probably be better rendered as "If that were true"

Oh shit i even read this years ago

Mikan is a great girl
Oh, man. That's so cute.
Maybe compared to girls from other mangos. For a girl from this one, she's low tier.
Which is funny, but actually kind of sad, since she won't win Asahi.

Probably end up with the glasses friend.
After reading this chapter, I'd say there's a good chance that Mikan simply has sex with him and gets pregnant, relationship or not.
>After reading this chapter, I'd say there's a good chance that Mikan simply rapes him and gets pregnant
Future Arc made wonders to her character.
Man, I was telling you people that Mikan was best girl, but none of you believed me. You were all like "nope, orange a shit," but looks like my gut was right on the money.
Nope, orange a shit.
She's obviously inferior to girls like alien and devil.
Devil a shit. Sensei the best
Nope, maybe if you had said vampire and alien you could make a case, but not with devil.
Devil is a shitty and unfunny character and every time a chapter is about her I want to skip it.
She's inferior to devil as a character.
>Alien is a shitty and unfunny character and every time a chapter is about her I want to skip it.


Fuck alienfags, they're the kirinofags of manga.
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>comparing Alium to kirino

you're free to disagree on best girl, but there are limits
>Says she is okay with her friend and loveinterest getting together
>Immediately backstabs them
>Tries to murder MC multiple times through blunt trauma

Alienfags are the worst. I'm glad /a/ likes Mikan best.
Actually, pretty sure /a/ likes Alium best.
/a/ has shit taste, what can I say.

I'm sorry for comparing a character as bad as Alien to Kirino.
>now I know why
"now I get it"
>DIY store,
"hardware store"

There's even a song about it http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q16yI2d9sNE

I don't get where "DIY store" came from.
>Tries to murder MC multiple times through blunt trauma
> murder

Woah there, it's pretty harsch.
>had recently begun thinking
"thought" or "was just thinking"

>go to the extremes?
"go to the extreme", or "go to extremes"
Plus those were clearly alien memory erasing and sleep aid devices.
>I heard it from Oka-kun
>So, Shiragami-san shot you down, huh?
>Asahi-kun, may fortune favor you!
Underdog-sama, I love you, please let me suck your dick
We actually have chapter 49 but if we keep bumping this thread. Our typesetter will kill himself.
Just don't post 49 until later today.
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What's happening here?
Remind me what are names of Asahi's bros
and in which chapter glasses-bro eats lunch with Mikan?
Any way we can help?
Anon' is ded
2 chapters left to end this arc.

Then complete insanity in chapter 51.
>and in which chapter glasses-bro eats lunch with Mikan?

Gee anon, do I really need to fucking explain it to you ?
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>Hey so Oka, who do you like---

>Who is that? Asahi?
>Yea Shima was rejected
>Huuuh okay

>Oh yea Oka-kun just so you know, I have a crush on Asahi.
>Yea I know
>... okay then
Shima the pathetic one, dating Aliens brother
Oka best boy, might like Mikan (no ones translated that part nor the 4koma yet so we can't be sure)
Sakura pretty cool guy, might be gay according to some (Note no one has ever said he likes Asahi so even if he is gay it's not in that direction)
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>... So what do you come here to do?
>You come to my work all the time
>Huh? I'm come here to eat pasta

>Are you stupid, who comes to a cake buffet to eat pasta?
>Yup, I'm coming to a cake buffet to eat pasta.

>Asahi!! Screw you I'm not jealous of you!! Why would I want an idiot like Shiragami-san!
>Huh? Dumbass!! That's what makes her cute. Makes me want to protect her!!
This and that time he was nearly killed by Sensei are the only 2 moments we see his eyes fully.
Chances are he probably wins da Mikan. If that's the case though it means he has Dragon in his blood since Rin has a dragon connection, and Dumpire is only a vampire.
Or it could come from the other side of the family.
I doubt Asahi has dragon blood, and Mikan having Dragon blood would kinda give her too much.
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>Dragon blood
You may want to brace yourself for some disappointment.

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