To all the /a/rtists out there!
We the <company name yet to decide> are looking for you!
Yes, you there, you fat creepy bastard infront of the screen.
Here's a challenge for you.
We are currently looking for an artist for our project.
It's a VN, and not your typical weee weee VN it's the most amazing, most heart ripping VN that's has ever been created on planet earth!!!1
So here's the challenge:
We want you to create your version of our first heroine, based on snippets of our story and a small profile of her, be aware that you have absolute freedom in your interpretation!
Our team will then decide which one of you fortunate people gets to work with us on that million hit!
PS: Make sure to leave your email so we can get in touch with you!
Here you go:
kind, selfless and devoted to what ever she may be tasked with, at times she is emotional
You'll get the best impression after you've read the intro part of our story, because that pretty much expresses her sweet personality best.
Fell free to ask questions and whatnot, and grammar isn't a top priority yet.
How stupid can you be to think this will actually go anywhere? Your VN project will crash and burn just like the rest of the 99.9% E-VN projects. Also, I don't think you're inspiring anyone to work for you when you make it obvious you don't intend to pay them and insult them. Enjoy your failure, mongrel.
Well our team is all set, all we need is a skilled artists now. We got everything covered except that.
And yea I thought it'd be 'funneh', I'm sorry for insulting you anon-kun~
you posted this on /v/ too. go away
Our team posted this on multiple boards to draw more attention.
your teams shit, your ideas are shit, and you will never succeed
Don't you dare to insult our hard working team!!! ~
><company name yet to decide>
>you fat creepy bastard
>most heart ripping VN that's has ever been created on planet earth!!!1
>kind, selfless and devoted to what ever she may be tasked with, at times she is emotional
Please tell me you are trolling us.
No pay, no work.
Your pastebin seems very lackluster and unpromising. Also, you're not going to get much luck finding an artist here, especially if you're not willing to pay for services. You should just abandon this thread before more people attack you. Just a friendly suggestion.
The story looks like a Zero no Tsukaima rip-off.
>You awaken too find yourself alone
Three words until the first mistake, are you 15?
Well, how much are you paying?
I think you have to show them your work before payment is discussed.
Wait, so you want to make a VN, but you don't even have artists you trust? Go shill somewhere else.
All I'm reading is "Outbreak Company" here.
First off, artists are a fundamental part of VN, so why don't you have one yet?
Two, you'll fair better in /jp/ since they're more forgiving with this kind of shit.
Three, you can try the drawfag thread too.
I just hope it's not another harem VN though. God knows we don't need another one of that.
I think this will make a great copy pasta, thanks for sharing.
>Two, you'll fair better in /jp/ since they're more forgiving with this kind of shit
Oh boy, time to lurk the catalog 'til I see this shit pop up and get treated like it deserves.
It even has a <company name yet to decide>.
On a totally unrelated note, you know what's annoying? Typing out a really difficult captcha then all of a sudden it expires and changes right after you type the last letter.
You may want to try somewhere else. I'm not too hot and bothered but a lot of people around here take offence to the sort of attitude you're taking, /a/ for /a/utism and all. Really, I'd get off 4Chan entirely if you're looking for people.
Good look with what you're doing and all but uuuh... seriously, you're just going to find fire around these parts, and it's ready to catch onto anything that gives it air.
Sit back and enjoy the show, /a/.
>thinks he will make a VN with one character designer
>implying this isn't a email fish
>I posted it on /jp/ that will sure show them xD Epic
They couldn't even use an appropriate OP image.
Seriously man, god damn google and their shilling, and jewt for using recaptcha.
"Don't want to unblock google cookies and log in to your google account, silly goy? Have this then!"
Your ideas are shit
You don't even have a real story, all you have is small snippets
You'll never complete this project
You never should have started unless you already had an artist friend willing to help
go buy a learn to draw manga book and do your own fucking work you cunt
Got it from the catalog, shill.
You'd have better luck begging in the /evn/ or /salty/ generals on /vg/.
>keeps saying "our team"
We all know it's just you, you fucking useless idea guy.
Oh, hey, that thread gave me one of the banners I made. Hadn't seen it in months...
OP is actually the programmer, I'm the musician and and the "idea guy" story writer is taking notes on the criticism. Obviously that is just from the roughest draft of the intro, we don't want to give anything away.
That's how it is.
Whatever happened to Memento Vivere and Loliconvict?
>OP is actually the programmer
>implying you need a dedicated programmer for ren'py
>slams in to you and you are both thrown to the ground. Blushing she begins to speak softly with an apologetic tone and look on her face. You understand nothing that she says. Amidst the sudden confusion you notice your hand is on her breast and you quickly pull away and jump to your feat.
I was actually considering helping, but then I read this.
Slow as molasses but alive.
Slow but sort of living, yea. They lost the second writers so it's all on one person's shoulder.
Everything is not finite.
We gladly accept every bit of constructive feedback.
So what don't you like about that particular part? The boob part?
I'm sorry that you've been trolled so much, OP. You have to understand that /a/ is full of broken people who have failed or never even tried to reach for their dreams. They are the kind of people who work at convenience stores as nightshift, bitter and broken and hopeless. They'll attack anything and anyone they see going further than them in life.
Well, considering I've got a decent job that allows me to still go after project like this, I can see where all that hatred comes from.
Translation: We have everything we need, except for the most important thing we need.
But seriously OP I shouldn't have to tell you that you don't recruit like this.
Guess what faggot. Anyone can fucking write and "program" a VN with no prior experience. What you're doing isn't special. But few people can actually draw well enough to generate interest in a VN. So you're basically asking someone with more talent than you to do whatever you want them to for free. Are you fucking retarded? Get the fuck out of here.
We are looking for someone to work WITH us not for us.
Everyone who's willing to take part in our project can contribute own ideas.
But we want people to join because they enjoy doing it, not because they have to.
>anyone can write a VN
That's like saying anyone can write a novel. Sure, anyone can write it, but it's going to be shit.
Well judging by OP's post, whatever he's writing is going to be ultra-shit then.
Oh boy, you sure will have a lot of work.
About the narrative in the pastebin; is that anextract from the script or just a partial summary of the scene?
You know, with an external verification for every post they can track who everyone is.
convenience stores exist outside of Japan????????
It's not a simple VN, it's 3d action platformer rpg vn with cover based shooting mechanics and quick time events. It's cool.
You're going to need a lot more than that.
Shows that you guys know nothing about what you're doing here.
Is that so? Then pray tell, what language are you using? Any engines, or going from scratch?
It's written very poorly, you repeat words too often and the sentence structure is a mess. It leads me to believe you are a high school freshman.
>[Nika]"My government sent out what you would call a video game to your planet, within
the game you were asked a series of questions to determine eligibility to live here in Choblann"
So, The Outbreak Company?
He was beeing sarcastic, also he was not OP. They do classic VN shit ie. They can take litteraly anyone that know how to use computer to write a code for them.
Pretty sure even hell doesn't have room for people who produce that sort of demonic shit of a game. It's like you collected all the worst ideas from the game industry, who does that?
>replying to a troll post
>actually having to code to make a VN
Just an extract of the intro, we're gladly accepting any constructive feedback.
So it's an action game with cutscenes? Did you just come to /a/ because you were afraid /v/ would mexican gangbang your thread?
Here's your constructive feedback:
>The idea of someone taking that post serious
Are you fucking retarded.
didnt KS, the best VN out there, that outclassed everything professionally made in japan, start like this too?
Not even KS started this bad.
And leave the kiddy sarcasm for rebbit.
For your sake, I hope you find a really good editor for your writer too. That character interaction was so-so fanfiction tier.
Well then, there are two big problems that carry through the text.
The first one is that you tell too much. In most cases saying less is more rewarding in the long run. And info dumps are never a good option. You also should think about narrative levels and add reader into your equation as you leave too little for their imagination. This is especcialy important for an intro.
The second problem is that you use too much description when talking about what the protag thinks. What you do is that you 'tell'. An intovert like the protag tends to have a rich inner life so why not 'show' it. A lot VNs use inner monologue of stream of consciousness to that effect.
>you awake in a giant house
>in an unknown world
How does he know he's in an unknown world without even looking outside of the house?
OK, OP you made me read all of this.
The story happens in a fantasy country that has strict social hierarchy that servant is afraid of being beaten by their master. People speak unknown foreign language but hey we got some magical auto-translating device. Oh shit it even have a shy elf maid!
Every /a/non who are not blind can tell that you are copying Outbreak Company. You should just write a fan fiction instead.
>Outclassed muv luv
That image is rather cute. Although I feel like the bottom girl's shoulders would get pretty sore pretty fast
More like her back. Even without her getting topped like that, that's not a chair you want to be sitting on for hours at work.
This has to be a troll.
I'd like to but VN are the most pathetic things in existence. The Art in these things are so pandering and generic, that I refuse to participate in such a plebian medium.
It's narrator's info dump. To me it seems that it would make a nice text rpg rather than a novel.
Read Kira Kira.
Keep on hating VNs because nothing else will be as good.
You won't be the next Katawa Shoujo. Face it.
KS at least had an idea. Fuck disabled girls, here there is just nothing
>want VN medium
>still searching Artist
I bet you won't spare any dime for the artist, OP
But anon, pic related is the next katawa shoujo. It even has 4chan clamoring for an english translation just like 2ch was clamoring for a japanese translation of KS.
He offered USD$100 for the art of a whole fucking in /jp/.
I mean, this is just sad.
Well these faces are going to give me nightmares.
You mean they're going to give you boners.
Not even clicked, I would probably never get it up again.
OP pls stop.
That little girl is asking for it.
It took me a while to realize she was looking at the lewd side.
I offered nothing, I just asked if there're people who like drawing and want to take part in our project. Considering there're many draw threads on here each day. But as I said before, you rather like bashing other peoples work than helping. Well humanity in a nutshell.
>people who like drawing
Perhaps they aren't using Renpy.
You should ask in the drawthread:
Still really generic and bad art
How about Sekien no Inganock?
You think you can get away with shameless copying Outbreak Company?
Here's an idea
A grad student working to pay off debts for his imouto's hospital bills decides to try his hand in Pro-wrestling. So he enter Jushin Liger/Hashimoto/Chono(/a/ decides) dojo meeting other people from Idols, Sports addicts, and Gaijin as they work to become wrestlers.
Training, bonding, selling, taking stiff shots from Sensei and escorting Sensei to his matches while debuting as an up-and-comer tag team/singles/inter-gender team(/a/ decides) with an unforeseen rival dojo tries to dishonor your dojo by blackmailing MC
Exiled from Japan, MC travels from Germany, India, France, Mexico and America for punishment as he heard news of his friends and lovers moving on. He travels with his gaijin friend teaching him English and wrestling styles of other countries from Backyard Hardcore style, Hollywood American-style, and Lucha Libre while trying to cope with his worries for his imouto
Return to Japan. Will you win the G-Spot LoliClimax?
The rasslers are lolis and you are trapped in a loli dimension
Seriously speaking, the art isn't that bad. Check the gallery out.
Like I said on /v/, I'd have been willing to work until you said I wasn't getting paid.
>It even has 4chan clamoring for an english translation
People are translating it?
Oh god, why can't I stop laughing
>not your typical weee weee VN it's the most amazing, most heart ripping VN that's has ever been created on planet earth!!!1
"Blushing she begins to speak softly with an apologetic tone and look on her face. You
understand nothing that she says. Amidst the sudden confusion you notice your hand is
on her breast and you quickly pull away and jump to your feat."
Fuck you and fuck whoever stupid "artist" decides to work with you.
You bastard, I cannot believe I just looked. But in all seriousness, the artist suffers from sameface and that face is creepy as fuck.
I was just surprised that the art is actually relatively fine and not vommit inducing.
Because normally it makes me kind of depressed that everything usually looks like trash.
Sadly, that daki doesn't have a lewd side.
Jesus Christ. Please don't make this. It reads like awful fanfiction. And if you're hoping to make your studio (3 guys in a mailshare) some fame off this, don't bother, Katawa Shoujo already did that.
this is dumb
and I'm pretty sure I've seen this on fanfiction.net like 50 times
you'll need it
>studio (3 guys in a mailshare)
I couldn't contain my laughters
OP Get the fuck out of here you pleb.
Guys, please stop! you will make op feel bad and cry!
In case anybody has started working on this, here's a nice little soundtrack to get those creative juices flowing:
…Bloody hell. I only skimmed through it and fuck its bad. Reminds me a lot of my very first raw sketches when I started writing, which was 11. Since I've got nothing better to do, I'll give some constructive criticism. Even if your work seems like it was made 13 year old and its a pretty faggot thing to do, not to mention a bother.
If you give me something to criticize to, at least double check your spelling/grammer. And I'm very loosely using the word "check". It's awful. Try to write it on a program that checks it for you, like word or Google drive, since this is as basic that even an idiot might accomplish.
Don't be afraid to remove some parts, because it needs some (a lot of) trimming to do. Since I write from a 3rd person perceptive and am not that into VNs, I can't really judge how he views things. But it adds a lot of otherwise unnecessary and odd info which haven't gotten a clear reason how he got that.
If you want to use visuals as an indicator, add in small lines of what the art is saying at that moment. i.e.
You woke up…
[Picture of x, y and z]
You go to [y]
It makes the text less narrative and it gets smaller.
But really, re-read it, check for spelling/grammer, remove and add parts to it and then repeat that for the duration of ~3 months. If you ask why it was because I cringed so hard, even if its a bad ripoff of Outbreak Company and because it was full of hole information or piles of unnecessary information.
tl;dr It's bad.
D-do I pass,op?
you deserve to be executed via giraffe rape for wanting to collaborate
>I write from a 3rd person perceptive
Is this entire thread trolling?
why is advertising allowed on /a/?
So moot can make 20 bucks.
Jesus christ. Is OP still trying to get an artist from here?
/jp/ outright told him to fuck off.
>If you give me something to criticize to, at least double check your spelling/grammer.
oh the irony
Post your Kirino folder.
Op, once I finished with the /jp/ one its the turn of this one
>executed via giraffe rape
>not by guillotine gorilla
Pls no bully
>even got the pointy ears
This turned into a troll thread the moment OP posted that pastebin pile of crap.
Isn't there something like that in star trek?
>The story takes place in present-day Bavaria.
Socially awkward 24-year-old NEET Bernd Lauert starts a new life in the small mountain town of Unteralterbach. He is forced to take a job at a local police station to help with the investigation of a gang of sex offenders. But of course nothing is as it seems, and Bernd soon finds himself in a deep, supernatural mess.
You didn't even leave an inbox or talked about your VN dev group.
Yeah anon, I also have a VN set in my mind for quite some years now, but I'm not fucking doing it because I know that Western-made VNs can never, ever be successful.
I can see her thighs.
I would like to think OP is just trolling. Yeah, that's for the best.
Fuck, I wrote this on a smartphone. Like hell I'd check that of mine to judge a pile of crap like his.
Not like anything I ever say/write isn't a pile of crap.
100/10 man I almost fell from the chair.
are you liking it? want me to dump it all?
I vote for this guy. The details on the face are really good and the legs have a very "natural" feel to them, not to mention the beautiful hair and clothing. Stunning work anon.
You can see under her skirt and apron though.
Is this the birth of a new fetish?
ignore the haters OP, here's my take on her.
Shitpost all you want, anon.
This seems so uninteresting.
Can't you say what happens or how the plot unfolds?
Right now it's as generic as it can be.
I almost came.
>See-through naked aprons
Well OP looks like your thread wasn't a complete waste of time.
>Is this the birth of a new fetish?
God I hope so.
Good luck with your VN, OP. I'll gladly help with whatever you need.
Don't let this pathetic neckbeards destroy your pojects. They just want you to be worthless like them because they never get their shit done and their lives are empty.
What is Katawa Shoujo?
>They just want you to be worthless like them because they never get their shit done and their lives are empty.
I resent that remark. Some of us just do it for fun.
>They just want you to be worthless like them
Trust me I wish most people here were as worthless as me. But it can't be done.
try reddit or deviantart
theres less worthless virgins there
Only useless neckbeards find it funny to laugh at other people's dreams and projects.
While these people are doing their best, progressing and living for something, neckbeards are just stuck in the same shitty place, forever.
Read the pastebin and then come back.
Will you still say the same? Because fuck, you'd expect more if 3 (1) people agree to make a VN out of something
God damn brilliant 10/10 character design.
what? I did my best :(
I will gladly help you OP in one condition.
I shall use this art style.
Hey, she doesn't wear any.
I know, it's sad.
How do I request this in a drawfag thread?
Can I have a maid with a transparent apron?
Or Can I have a girl in a dress with a transparent skirt?
And which girl?
Leeron finally went through with the surgery?
What's wrong, kid?
>Only useless neckbeards find it funny to laugh at other people's dreams and projects
Or you know, I could just be your regular old asshole. A useless neckbeard would be too pathetic to even enjoy doing that.
>most heart ripping VN
KATAWA SHOUJO 2: Kenji's Revenge confirmed for release
Perhaps it will be less shit than the original
Did OP actually fuck off?
You post that picture and add some things along the lines of transparent vagina bones and want to have stuff similar to it.
Lets make this a thing, /a/
A niche, at best, project.
Nope still here.
Stil waiting for actual talent but >>100965759
is the best so far.
And I will take this as a joke.
Kirino worst girl.
It already is a thing, anons.
I think I will start to lurk drawfag threads just to see this. Damn that's lewd.
This thing better be 50h+
we have raw talent here.
>Still waiting for actual talent
Still hopeful I see.
Why so angry?
>My hips are moving on their own. and they will erradicate your penis.
Here goes nothing
pls don bully
I might just give up and do a kickstarter to hire some real talent.
Doe anyone know if theres an agency for these things?
What do you think, OP?
The /jp/ thread just got killed.
When will the jannie hit this one?
Upload your Kirino folder and we'll talk about it.
Love me some Tyrone.
Just fucking use K-Kisekae 2 for the girls.
for free? lol
i used freelancer.com and got a pixel artist to draw some maps for $250
im sure if anyone on your team works 1 day a week you guys can all pitch in and hire some one
this just keeps getting better